blog 14

Introduction:

My intro is too short it’s only a couple sentences long I need to extend it and explain the importance of MMA and how it entertains students on campus and how it may influence them to even partake in MMA on campus or close off campus. The UFC has been around for years and the sport even longer I personally participate and know professional fighters and the sport is their lives and I know it is more than just a fun thing to watch for ASU students.

My new intro:

The UFC is more the just a sport, the sport has shaped the lives of students and even taken their viewing time. The sport allows students to watch two men go at it in the ring and see who comes out. I know MMA has personally influenced me and has also influenced, my roommate we have MMA fever. Former ASU students are now professional fighters and my personal mentors. The world of MMA also keeps kids in shape and lets some stress be let out.

Body:

For my body paragraphs I need to make sure I actually incorporate an interview like in NPR I talk just about the subject the whole time and I need to interview a student or even my mma instructor who is a professional UFC fighter and see how it influenced him sense he graduated here from ASU. I should also use current students and see what they think of the UFC or how MMA may have influenced them.

My interview:

My interview needs to be more structured and actually ask questions I need to actually have a good interview not like the one I had earlier

New interview:

ME: do you know what the UFC is?

Manny: yes I do I watch all the fights

ME: would you say the UFC has influenced you here at ASU?

Manny: yes it has, because of mma I am training at AZ combat sports and I am in better shape and I have met so many cool new people and I have something to relieve the stress of the every day life at ASU.

Conclusion:

My conclusion needs to wrap things up. I do not at the moment have a tangible conclusion but I need to write one that will really wrap the podcast up and make thank the listeners and make the essay a good one.